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[JimInFlamez]

Hello battlenet, just made my first song, it's almost for all music tastes.
So let me know what do you think
[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R3ETy4EGm-I[/url]

[-KaMiKaZa-]

no singing = fail song

[Lowlife]

sounds decent for your first song
will try to listen to it a bit further along later
and give you some of my thoughts on it
am going to my gf now
and I had to shut off the song about halfway
cause apparantly, it makes chinchillas loose their shit


EDIT:
I didn't like some of the chello parts at first
cause imho, they didn't really match up with the guitar parts on a few occasions
but I'll try to go into more detail later when I get back

[Tecktonik.]

well done man , it's awesome , keep it up :O

[Cen]

excellent, but it's screaming for vocals and some good lyrics

[JimInFlamez]

Kamikaza wanna sing? XD, cant find anyone with good voice, anyone intersted pm me :P.
Lowlife waiting for your full review
tecktonic thanks
Cen i Heard your voice in the interview, it would fit in the song perfect

[Cen]

sure, I'll sing for you over mic lol xD

[Lowlife]

Overall, it's a nice song.

But:
- at seconds 49 to 50 you have a one second pause, which doesn't really work for me. You could make a bridge inbetween the slow and fast part to make it work better
- from one minute sixteen, you have cello comming in I think (I hope so, otherwise my ears are fucked up) they play three long notes twice in a row, I would make them play the third note lower then they played the first note, idk if it would work out with the guitar but you can play around with that for a little bit


those are the only things I would change in your song
they're only recommendations, you're free to follow them or leave them


tomorrow, I'll try to write some lyrics for you

which I'll send to you in a pm
you're free to use them or post them or whatever

I wish you all the best

[Cen]

Lowlife acting like a music pro all of a sudden ;P

[Lowlife]

Lowlife acting like a music pro all of a sudden ;P

/me not fat


EDIT:
am also just saying what I think
am trying to give constructive criticism
don't tell anyone

[JimInFlamez]

Wow, thanks really lowlife, I'll change that along with the ending and replace the audio at utube.
Ok waiting for lyrics

[Lowlife]

Wow, thanks really lowlife, I'll change that along with the ending and replace the audio at utube.
Ok waiting for lyrics

I hope I didn't fuck up your song
*hides*

[Taz.]

Can you pick a more random picture then this please ?

[Lowlife]

ok
lyrics are in your inbox
use them as you see fit
I don't mind if you want to make some alterrations to them
cause I'm not 100% happy with them for now
which means, I'll make some adjustments to it and send them to you if you need the adjusted lyrics
if you don't want me to adjust them
then I'll probably still adjust them
but not give them to you

[JimInFlamez]

Ok just made the second part, please let me know what you think, worse/better etc.
Btw I still cant find someone for vocals...